A reader decides from the first line whether to keep going. The rest of the page is for the people who already said yes in their head. So the first two lines carry the whole decision: what the event is, who it is for, and when it starts.

Here is a weak opening for a Thursday book club: "Welcome to our journey of literature and friendship! We love to gather and share ideas." It sounds warm and tells the reader nothing. Here is a stronger one: "A monthly book club for adults who want to finish the book. We meet Thursday at 7 pm at the Maple Street Cafe, upstairs room. This month: The Remains of the Day, about 250 pages." A reader knows in one line whether it is for them.

Before anyone asks, they want four answers. Put them near the top, in this order, and write each one as a plain sentence.

1. What happens in the room? Name the activity: a talk, a workshop, a tasting, a game night.
2. What should I bring or prepare? Say "nothing" if the answer is nothing. That is useful too.
3. Is it free, and do I need to reserve a seat? State both, even when the answer seems obvious to you.
4. Who runs it, and who can I ask? A name and one way to reach you, such as an email address or a phone number.

Four short answers take about 60 words. Readers scan for them, and a host who answers them in advance gets fewer messages in the week before the event.

A wall of text is the usual reason people stop reading. Keep each paragraph to two or three sentences. Use one list for the parts that are truly a list, such as the agenda or what is included. A list of everything in the description turns the page into a form, and people skim forms.

A useful test: read the description out loud on a phone-sized screen. If you run out of breath before the second paragraph ends, cut the first paragraph in half. Your readers will be on a phone, probably on a bus.

On Connections, the description box is where guests read the event page. Its helper text says: "What guests read on the event page. Leave a blank line between paragraphs." Follow that, and put one blank line between each paragraph you write.

Your own history with the topic, your reasons for starting the group, and your plans for next year are real, and they belong somewhere. They rarely belong in the first screen of an event page. Read your draft and mark every sentence that answers a question nobody asked. A sentence about why you love the book is interesting. A sentence about the venue's parking is useful. Keep the second kind and move the first to an About section, or cut it.

Watch for the phrase "we are excited to announce." It almost never adds information. Replace it with the thing you are excited about, stated directly: "Guest speaker: a local nurse who runs the free blood pressure clinic."

Finish the description with the action you want. Say it once, in plain words: "Reply yes below so we know how many chairs to set out." Repeating it three times in the same paragraph feels pushy. One clear sentence, placed right after the last useful fact, works better.

Do not end on a thank-you alone. A reader who finishes on "thanks for reading" has no idea what to do next, and the page does nothing for the event.

Your description will often be read on a small screen, and your own laptop view hides the problems. Open the event page on a phone, the way a guest would, and check each item below. Ask a friend who has never seen the event to read it and tell you what they would do next. Their answer is the test that counts.

• The first two lines say what it is, who it is for, and when.
• The four answers (what happens, what to bring, free or paid and reserve or not, who to ask) are in the first screen.
• Each paragraph is two or three sentences, with a blank line between paragraphs.
• No sentence exists only to praise the group or the speaker.
• The last sentence names one action, with a deadline if you have one that is real.
• A friend who did not write it can say what the event is in one sentence.

Edit once a month for the next few events. If the same question shows up in your messages every time, add its answer to the description. Your page will get better because it answers the questions your readers actually have, not the ones you expected.

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